Revision of Exploratory Essay

In the second draft of my exploratory essay I started my revision process by asking a genuine question and attempting to awnser it. I did this to try and focus my paper more, as well as give the paper more of a personal voice. I do not know if I accomplished adding my personal voice into this essay as well as I would have liked. Sometimes I feel that this paper is half academic, half me just talking my ideas out. I am confused if this is supposed to be the way an explorative essay looks, because the point of it seems to be for exploring your ideas or am I just wrong? Further improvment I made in this paper includes developing my thoughts from my previous draft and putting more stucture into the paper. I moved alot of stuff around in my paper to make it flow better. My first draft was literally one long paragraph, this new draft is split into an introduction type paragraph, my question paragraph, my awnser paragraph, and my concluding idea. I feel that this makes the paper less random, and easier for the reader to get through. I also changed alot of my wording in this draft becuase in my previous draft it was often very vauge and ambigous. I tried to give more examples from the text to back up the points I was trying to make. While I feel that this new draft is an improvment, I feel that I would benifit from rewriting this draf again, and connfrencing before I hand it in. One of the problems I expirenced when rewriting this paper is that we read The Sound and the Fury so long ago and talked certain aspects of it to death, I had trouble trying to find qoutes to back up my ideas. Then after talking to a lot of different kids in the class, I figured out that they were not using qoutes so I assumed I did not have to. I an unsure about wether or not qoutes would add to my paper and help make it stronger. I feel that I myself am a better narrative and analitical writer than exploratory writer, partly because I have not had very much expirence with exploratory writing and partly because I have trouble thinking that way. I usually come up with an idea or main point and then elaborate not the otherway around. I would define myself as a very "in the box" thinker. While I enjoy Enligh and Social Studies very much, I always find myself exceling in Math and Science classes where the material is very concrete and definate. I consider quality work to be something I am proud of. While this might be cliche, I know that if I am excited or dont dread handing in a paper, it is good. If I am not feeling so hot about handing in a paper, or wish I had an extra day to work on it, it probably isnt that good. Suprisingly some of the pieces I am proudest of writing took me the least amount of time to complete. At the end of writing this second draft I think I have learned to go with the flow. I decided to just write down everything I was thinking or feeling and then go through and organize it later. I initially wrote this paper with out any paragraphs, just my thought process. Then I went through and reorganized it, making different paragraphs and putting similar ideas together. Honestly, I have no clue if this new draft is what you were looking for, but I did try hard to write it and plan on conferencing with you before my next draft.